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PostPosted: Mon Jul 02, 2007 5:08 am    Post subject: Makura Desher (Quincy) Reply with quote

As directed I'm making this a new post instead of simply editing my old one so don't think I'm crazy ^^;;;

:Name:: Makura Desher (First name last, refuses to go by first name)

:Alias:: Alice Memoria

:Gender:: Female

:Race:: Quincy

:Age:: 18

:Physical Description:: At first glance Desher Makura does not appear intimidating. The girl reaches a scant and unimpressive 5’5ā€. Her frame is small but tone, years of athletics and training making her stronger then her slim figure hints at. Despite her short stature her torso is small leaving the impression of legs longer then they really are. Her chest is on the smaller to average side, reaching an acceptable B cup. Makura’s hindquarters have been named ā€œone of the nicest pieces of ass in Yumekotoā€ by a certain Owen Tempa. Though such flattery should be taken with a dump truck of salt, if not an oceans worth. Over all her frame is light, lithe, and is stronger then it appears.

Despite hardship and some time Makura continues to have a girlish face, her scowls often appearing more like pouts. Still her large dark brown-nearly black-eyes continue to be able to intimidate friend or foe with their sharp glare. This not so famous face is framed by a mass of straight brown hair. Though Makura used to change hair styles with the frequency of every month she’s finally seemed to settle down a bit. The brown tresses now extend a little bit past her shoulder, a few pieces on either side of her face cut to her cheek. As for bangs Makura’s are sparse but long, dangling right above her eyes. She usually leaves her hair down though on occasion she will pull it back in a ponytail or pigtails for special occasions or when playing sports.

While Makuras skin is light and mostly unmarred by scares it’s not unusual for her to have a few scratches and bruises from fighting hollows. While the Quincy usually hides these injuries by clothing it’s not unusual for her to be sporting a brightly colored band aid or three. As for piercing she has 3, two holes on each of her ear lobes while one piercing on the upper part of her left ear. Makura also has a tattoo that’s branded on her right upper arm and a scar that goes across her right palm from years ago. (Heres a pic of the tatto)


:Personality::
The Desher Makura of today is both the same and much different from the young rebellious teenager that first entered Yumekoto. She’s still athletic and competitive, loving sports and always concerned about her weight and if she’s working out enough. This obsession with eating right and staying fit can occasionally cause the Quincy trouble as she will go on sprees of extra intense work outs and little to no food. In fact if anything Makura works out even more then she used to. It’s a matter of pride that she does well in sports without using her powers and to this day Makura would rather her appearance be insulted then her athletic ability. She hates it when people cheat at games-be it a race or a board game-and loves to see a person push their limits. Over all one of her biggest pet peeves is when people give up without trying or half ass it at sports. Without realizing it the Quincy usually finds herself thinking less of people that aren’t athletic.

Another of Makura’s quirks that has persisted is her habit of piling on the work. Although she is no longer in school the Quincy constantly throws herself into activities and thrives on over scheduling herself. Though the stress can occasionally get to be too much Makura thrives on having a full plate of activities. She feels useless and unimportant without a long list of responsibilities and it wouldn’t be far from the truth to say she does a lot to not only feel like she belongs, but also to feel important. Her organization skills remain quirky but effective for her. She doesn’t mind clutter so much but hates dirt and grime-due to her allergies she’s always had to clean a lot and a messy room usually drives the girl up the wall. Despite this she still hasn’t learned anything about cooking and when attempts are made at the very least she makes a huge mess if not blowing something very large up.

Yet Makura has grown up…in her own way. She’s still sarcastic and snappy-likely to go on a rant and shout when she feels awkward…though time has made the young woman a bit more comfortable in her own skin so her outbursts are a bit less. She’s more honest with herself about her feelings, even though she continues to try and keep the world oblivious. Also the Quincy girl has gained some confidence, she still has her moments and doubts every so often… But over all Makura has gotten over her insecurities about her weaknesses and her powers. While she still has the occasional nightmare about the adventures with Owen in America it no longer haunts her so strongly. She’s accepted both her love of Kariudo and the fact she might have to fight for it as well as coming to terms with what it means to be a Quincy. Her fear of being an outcast and made a freak for what she is has faded somewhat thanks to her own growth and also the current situation in the world.

Still there’s always room for growth and Makura still has more then her fair share of faults. She remains one of the moodiest women to ever exist in Yumekoto and once you set her off you’re likely to get an ear full and a hair yank before it’s over. Her pride still something fierce and when she feels she is right-even in the face of facts proving the opposite-Makura will hold her ground. She’s learned to follow her heart more but still feels insecure and ashamed about her rather pathetic economic status-trying to hide and improve it all the time. And of course there’s always that passionate burning hatred of her mother. Also Makura is still deathly afraid of sharks, refusing to go even up to her knees in salt water. She also loves shojo manga, the best known of which being Forever Sky Adventure a series which she can be a bit obsessive about. Her hobbies, aside from sports, involve collecting whatever Sky Forever Adventure merchandise is on sale and of course finding new jobs to pay for it.


:Clothing::

Day to Day: Makura wears sporty style clothing, unsurprising since she is an athlete. While running her hair is held back, even when she isn’t its rare that isn’t a ribbon or clip in place to help keep the hair out of her eyes. As she's grown up Makura has become more comfortable with wearing revealing clothing and in warm weather she'll sport short shorts and mini skirts with much less fuss. However fashion has never been the girl’s first concern and most the time she's content to wear jeans/shorts and layered shirts and sweatshirts of blue, green, and black. Her ā€œusual outfitā€ is a pair of jean shorts with a blue and green jersey with her name and volleyball number (6) printed in white on the back.

At Work: At The Fourth Wall it is mandatory for all employees to dress in cosplay. Usually Makura is able to pick from Leikos multitude of clothing however its not unheard of for her to have to wear specific outfits that relate to a sale or special promotion her boss has running. There is an almost endless limit of outfits Leiko has bought and approved, the only similarity between them all is that they could no way be mistaken for normal clothing. While Makura often tries to wear the least revealing and plainest outfits her boss (Leiko Ren) enjoys dressing the Quincy up in frilly dresses and cutesy magical girl outfits.

:Country/Time:: Japan/Modern Day

:Background Information:: The battle that nearly wiped out the Quincy 50 years ago left few survivors. However one of the lucky men to live through that day was named Meiyo Danamie. Meiyo eventually married, he had a daughter and continued to support the Qunicy through the rest of his life. Dreaming of seeing the Quincy rise again Meiyo tried to instill in his daughter the beliefs of the Quincy and pass on the tradition. For the Danamie had always been members of Quincy as far back as any record of Quincy had existed. Yet that was not to be. Desher Danamie was not a violent woman and her father’s obsession and delirium in later years made her refuse her heritage and obligation to Quincy. She instead married, had two children and was very content with her life. A normal life that was as peaceful as she could hope for. Suppressing her powers it seemed Desher could live happily with a normal husband and normal children.

There was one incident in these early years though, that is worth mentioning if only for its lasting effect on the young Makura. The family was vacationing at the beach when a young surfer was attacked by a shark and while he was severally injured the young man miraculously survived. In all the ensuing confusion young Takai, eager to see what the fuss was about, snuck himself and his sister free of their mothers concerned arms and went closer to see as the young man was pulled ashore. The poor youth was a bloody mess and too this day Makura has a deep seeded fear of sharks. Yet, this incident aside the family was prosperous and happy. Ken Makura was steadily rising in his career while Desher happily raised their normal family.

At least until her son Taka began to see ghosts, Deshers daughter (Deshy) also began to see things, it wasn’t long before the children would randomly stop and begin chatting away with some spirit and much to Deshers horror she began to once again see the spirits. Panicked over her own resurfacing abilities and her children’s budding talent she tried unsuccessfully to somehow stop her children from becoming aware of their abilities. She desperately tried to protect the normal happy world she’d created. She told her children their abilities were strange, that they were wicked and couldn’t be controlled. She told them that people would shun them if they talked about it and how abnormal it was. She did her best to make them fear and dislike their gifts. But it wasn’t to be. In fact the stress and frustration became so much that her husband finally could not stand his wife’s strange behavior and filed for a divorce.

At the time their father left both Taka and Deshy were in middle school. They continued to learn about their powers however both had grown wise enough to not speak of it with their mother. Instead they talked amongst themselves, read whatever they could get their hands on and one day the siblings curiosity led them to a stranger that would change both of their lives. A member of Quincy stumbled upon the pair while they were speaking to a ghost. Hearing that the pair was related to the Danamie family intrigued him even more and after several long talks and much pleading on the children’s part the world of Quincy was opened to them. The relationship with their mother had been strained before but now in high school and knowing the truth…the floodgates were open in a whole new way. Taka treated the woman like she didn’t exist, looking through her, ignoring her words and refusing to acknowledge her. When he finally graduated from high school he packed up said goodbye to his sister, never once acknowledging his mothers tears. But Takas treatment was gentle compared to Deshys anger.

She’s always blamed the divorce on her mother and years of lies and harshness over her powers erupted into a very ugly thing. All the lies about how evil and uncontrollable their powers were, all the stories about how they would be shunned and hated if they told father. To say she was pissed was an understatement. Snapping at the older woman at every chance she got Makura-now refusing to use her mothers name-indulged herself by saying any and every hurtful thing she could to the older woman. Not that she was around her much. School, clubs and training with Quincy kept her busy.

Her willful daughter overpowered the soft-spoken peaceful Desher and to this day the relationship is more servant and master then parent and child. Makura makes it clear she only tolerates her mothers company because Taka is in college and father in America. Desher endures her child’s abuse because if nothing else ā€˜Makura’ is all she has left with her husband and son gone. The tables have been turned in a very big way and Makura shows no sign of growing less disgusted and hateful of her lying mother.

Since Moving to Yumekoto…

A lot of things have happened to Desher Makura since arriving in Yumekoto. She’s made a pact with Owen Tempa, her assistance in battle in return for his help with training. Her hatred of Shinigami has been tempered to a dislike. Being around other young Quincy and AdH has forced the teen to open herself up, if even only a little bit. Leiko Ren owner of the popular Fourth Wall bookstore has employed her and despite harassment from her boss it’s an easy and well paying job.

Unfortunately after a trip with Owen and some of his allies to America very little in Desher Makuras life has moved in a positive direction. The guilt of not being able to save so many people, having to admit her own physical and mental weakness all piled up inside of the Quincy girl. When the group went on a trip to a onsen Makura ended up having a breakdown in front of Daisuke Amachi and Kariudo Hayabusa. For a brief time it seemed the event would help the two warring Quincy bond...but they quickly degenerated to their usual fighting. Makuras guilt over her failures and weakness still continues to torment the young woman. The battles against Owens family had shattered her long-standing beliefs about right and wrong. Currently Makura is in a moral conflict, unable to continue believing in a faith that has let her down yet still feeling guilt over her new behavior. With her brothers urging she has decided to assist and eventually join The Guild.

Under so much stress the Quincy fled to America to be with her brother, giving no warning to friends or family. Unfortunately the trip did little to ease the girls mind and when she returned to Yumekoto her problems-as well as several new ones-were still waiting for her. She disliked the Guild and had begun disassociating herself from her brother’s faction, causing trouble between the usually close siblings. To add fuel to the fire Makura had finally begun to understand her feelings for a certain fellow Quincy…only to return and learn he was dating a geisha by the name of Ikyouko. After an awkward reunion there was a brief time where she joined forces with old friends to assist Daisuke Amachi, yet this partnership was soon over and Makura went back into her seclusion. Things eventually reached their breaking point when Kariudo and Makura ran into each other in the park and after some tense words the pair finally admitting their feelings for each other. However Kariudo was still dating Ikyouko and Makura was still torn with herself, in the end the Quincy girl fled-but not before vowing to find the same happiness Kariudo had with Ikyouko.

The disappearance…

Two weeks after the fateful encounter Desher Makura was fighting a low level hollow when-as she was about to tear through the beasts mask-a blast hit her. Despite sending the Quincy girl into a wall she was relatively uninjured, yet even after the hollow was destroyed Makura would not wake up. In short order she was rushed to the hospital and the Quincy was declared to be comatose. Despite the efforts or doctors and one Kariudo Hayabusa the reason let alone a way to wake the girl was not found. Weeks turned to months without change until one day when Kariudo went to visit the brunette…she wasn’t there. Doctors and nurses had no records or recollections of a girl by Makuras name or description. It seemed the Quincy girl had simply disappeared…

The Truth

Takai Makura had never been terribly attached to the Guild, they used him and he’d used them. So naturally when turmoil struck the organization that had aided him he abandoned them and took with him everything of value that was both rightfully his and…not so rightfully his. He had bigger matters to worry over, science and power did not come to those who had scruples like morality…and Takai Makura really wanted power. So with two Advent Human companions and an ass load of stolen technology the Quincy began his experiments. His goal? To create the technology to implant or erase memories, thoughts, ideas into those around him. A powerful weapon with limitless potential and to assist him he had the aid of two Advent Humans. Odin, an unmotivated but morally lacking young American man with the ability to read others thoughts when making eye contact and James a Canadian Advent Human who could directly communicate and interact with technology via his mind.

Unfortunately the project had a few major kinks, such as finding a decent subject and funding. James was left to handle the financial matter and Takai knew right away where to find an oblivious target. For who else could be easily observed? Who else’s mind did the Quincy man know so well? Deciding it was time to give his baby sister a visit Takai Makura had Odin and James pack up the equipment of Project ALICE to visit the not so quiet or little city of Yumekoto.

Unfortunately the device only worked when the subject was asleep. To make matters worse the brain seemed to transfer the signals sent to the subject into dreams…rather then altering their actual memory. While not what he’d intended Takai soon found that if sent frequently enough that a subject would respond to the suggestions. Now by this point in time Takai Makura had more then his sister for an unwitting test subject. After all a mad scientist needs a hobby right? It wasn’t all fun and torment though; Takai discovered that the device could send the target detailed dreams while unconscious….meanwhile Odin and James were making a breakthrough on Project ALICE. Since Makura had responded most effectively to dream manipulation it was no wonder why they chose her to be the first…only when the Quincy girl didn’t awaken after being struck by the beam…well it was a result that was slightly less then desirable.

A few months went by with Desher Makura in coma, all the while Takai, Odin, and James were busy working on improving the device…and you know…maybe figuring out exactly what they’d done to the Quincy girl. In any case while the trio couldn’t work through the distance problem they did manage to perfect the device itself and after erasing the memory of the hospital staff Takai decided it was time to relocate, with a still unconscious Makura in toe. However, it seemed that the groups little stunt attracted a bit of unwanted attention. Not to fear, destroying the documents related to the subject Takai planted four microchips containing the data into the safest hiding place he could think of. His sister! Marking the area with a tattoo of his own design the Quincy then set about waking his sister…

The Return

It was a bit of a shock for Desher Makura to awaken in…Canada of all god forsaken places, with a sore aching arm-when exactly HAD she gotten such a weird ass tattoo-and a brother who offered answers that led to more confusion then peace. She’d been drunk when she’d gotten it…which coincidently was how she’d fallen down a flight of stairs and banged her head…oh she didn’t know how she’d gotten drunk? Well, HE certainly didn’t, wasn’t it enough that he’d fixed whatever she’d jostled loose in her head?

Either way the Quincy girl found any attempt to return to Yumekoto thwarted. Bad weather canceled the flight; her ticket was lost, the airport had no record of her purchasing a ticket by the time a terrorist threat shut down the airport Desher Makura knew other forces were at work. Yet, Takai Makura simply smiled and nodded unwilling to offer so much as a scrap more. Meanwhile nightmares plagued the Quincy girl. She’d return to Yumekto to find it in shambles, to find everyone gone, to find everyone had turned against her, to a hundred different painful scenarios that only ended badly. Still Desher Makura tried. She tried to find happiness in the foreign world with different people and places, a new home apart from Yumekoto.

In roughly a month she’d found a stable job, started taking classes at a local college, and even found an ADH fellow by the name of Odin who she clicked well with. It seemed like an easy and peaceful life…more then she’d ever had in Japan. Happiness came so easy there and yet…yet the brunette remained restless. Everything reminded her of Yumekoto! She’d wander around computer stores on occasion just to hear the techno babble for gods sake! To make it worse sky forever adventure was dubbed HORRIBLY. And not to mention her tattoo sort of…no it couldn’t be….it said Kariudo?!?!?! After this discovery the girl spent roughly an hour staring at the mirror in horror…

Almost every night she was plagued by nightmares of Yumekoto, dreams warning her to stay away… And yet on those few nights when these dreams didn’t touch her heart the girl dreamt herself back in the Fourth Wall, bickering with Kariudo…laughing with Hime-chan, training with Owen, hell she even missed Ama a little!!! It was home sickness and it seemed to grow stronger with each passing day. During this time the Quincy girl grappled with her feelings. Surely it was too late to go back. She’d been gone so long…Kariudo had Ikyouko and all of her other friends…surely they had moved on as well. Like her dreams warned, going back would only hurt more…

Over all Makura spent two months in Canada. Then, one dark night the Quincy girl pulled herself from the beds warm covers and packed. If pain and sadness awaited her…then they wouldn’t have much longer to wait! Tracing the lines of her tattoo thoughtfully the girl drove to the airport. Her mind abuzz, did those nightmares mean anything? Why was she throwing away a chance for real happiness to go back there? Why? Why? Because…because everything she loved was in Yumekoto! With a new resolve the girl stepped toward the entrance to the airport…

Needless to say the sight of Takai standing there, so obviously waiting, was a surprise. Their exchange was brief and painful. For Takai wasted no time laying out his explanation. ā€œWhy do you want to go back? For some boy that’s forgotten you? For friends that don’t matter? There’s nothing there for you! Do you really think you can have happiness so simply? If I thought for a second it was possible…I wouldn’t let you go. The truth is that you are not the kind of person that’s suited for those kinds of relationships. That kind of happiness…it’s defiantly something you will never haveā€

Desher Makura could never remember her brother looking colder then he did in that moment. Not suited… his words rang through her ears. For a boy that’s forgotten me…for friends that don’t matter….really….in truth it would be foolish to think going back will solve everything…Shaking her head the dark eyed girl stared defiantly at her brother.

ā€œIf…If the happiness I want were so easy…then I would be disappointed! I’m going back!ā€

ā€œAn ill fate awaits you in Yumekotoā€¦ā€

ā€œThen that is the fate I embrace!ā€ with these fiery words she stepped past her brother and into the airport, a long flight home awaiting her…and an even longer fight.




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:Weapon(s)::

Weapon 1 Name | Kurai Suzaku (Dark Celestial God)

Description | Makuras carries a Kunai and Chain, a weapon often used by ninjas in the past it is now the young woman's weapon of choice. It is essentially a small hand sized sickle (about one foot long) with a long link chain thats about four feet long attached at the bottom and a weight at the other end. Lastly the blade itself is a dark silver color and the blades shape is curved. The weapon is very precious to her and she carries it with her whenever she can. ( Her weapon)

Weapon Level 1|-On the Kurai Suzaku’s blade spiritrons wrap around the weapon. A slight alteration of this is when the spiritrons around the Kurai Suzaku surround not only the blade but also extends down the handle into the chain allowing Makura to extend and chain further distances for a short period of time. In essence she uses the spiritrons to form extra links on the chain temporarily so she can strike further distances two or three feet. Unfortunately an unpleasant side effect is that holding unto the chain can become quite painfully very fast. Generally she doesn’t channel the spiritrons into the chain unless things aren’t going very well at all…

Weapon Level 2(Gained during LA Arc)-Makura materializes her weapon, the blade is now about 3 feet long and 1 foot high. The blade is a bluish gray color, dark blue at the top but fading down to gray at the bottom. The scythes handle is a little longer, about half a foot and it is solid gray. The chain has also undergone a transformation. The links are thicker, longer and the Quincy is able to create stable chain extensions that don’t burn her if held too long, the chain extensions are a blue while the normal chains are gray. Lastly the weight at the end of the Kurai Suzaku’s chain is now round, about the size of a soft ball, instead of being a stick. The sphere is a blueish gray like the blade, seeming to fade from blue to gray and back to blue all across the sphere.


Weapon 2 Name | Sekhmet

Description | Sekhmet is scythe that stands at 5ft from gem tip to gem tip. While constructed almost entirely of spiritrons the weapon appears to be made of a black wood with the exception of the silver blade and the two gems at its head and base. At the bottom of the scythe floats a yellow baseball sized jewel that sometimes looks eerily like an eye, this is entirely spiritron made and currently seems to serve no propose. The other jewel is a large heart shaped gem that floats at the top of the Quincy girl’s weapon in between the handle and the blade. For a visual example clicky right here! (Art credit to the BloodGolem)



: Destructive Arts::

Sakeme no Seishin (Rift of Spirit)- Makura sends a charge of spiritrons into her sickles blade, making it glow faintly. Upon contact with a solid object the weapon’s glow increases and a curve of purple energy proportionate to the blade shoots out. It travels for several feet before fading away. The energy has a cutting effect and is equivalent to if the blade itself had slashed the target.

Hirenkyakyu- By gathering Spiritrons under their feet, a Quincy then sets off small reactions between the Spiritrons to be able to reach an incredibly high speed of movement. This also allows the use of Spiritrons to achieve high jumping capabilities as well as other uses (ie. Using the Hirenkyakyu to move themselves in mid-air). But, as with all skills, there is a limit on the amount of movement capable of being done with this Art as well.

Tennyo Kyouran (Celestial Maiden Fury)-The rounded weight at the end of Makura’s chain explodes into hundreds of sharp shards that go flying in all directions. Though Makura maintains enough control to keep the fragments from hitting her she is unable to protect anyone else from the blast. After several seconds the shards freeze mid-air then regroup and reform into the weight. A useful wide ranged attack with drawbacks being she is unable to fully utilize her chain sickle while the weight is missing. And of course the issue of not being able to keep the shards from piercing allies as well as enemies. This ability is only usable with her chain sickle.

Passion of Heaven Flame-Makura forms a small ball of spiritrons that then burst into a large blue flame. Makura is able to throw this at targets or simply hold it however keeping the flames going requires the flame to be fed more spiritrons, without this it would begin to fade and finally disappear after a minute or so.

Mashin Hiren-A special advanced form of Hirenkyakyu that is has been passed down the Danamie line. It follows the same basic principles of hirenkyakyu only it allows the wielder to go faster, move higher and longer then the average hirenkyakyu technique. With a seemingly unlimited potential the greatest cap on this ability comes from the users own body. Using Mashin Hiren for a long period of time causes the users body to start being torn apart, however the pain created generally makes user stop before this happens. Currently Makura can’t use it more then five posts in a row without blacking out. Regardless of what happens using Mashin Hiren at all is straining on the human body and takes a lot out of the user.

Silent Shriek Blast-With this ability Makura forms a ball of spiritrons about the size of a basketball and hurls it into the air. The ball then explodes with a blinding flash of light and a deafening chorus of what sounds like screams. While the blast is not intended-and doesn’t-harm those around it directly the light generated can temporarily blind enemies, as well as cause pain and distraction with the ear splitting noise is generates. The closer to the ball the more likely a target is to become blinded/death and the effects fade after 1-2 posts. While Makura herself is immune to the blast she had no power to protect others, it’s a general blast that can effect friend just as much as foe.




: Theme Songs::
Battle Theme 1:
Battle Theme 2:
Image Song 1-normal:
Image Song 2-serious:
Image Song 3-sad:




Random Facts About Desher Makura


Blood Type: B
Flower: Azalea
Color: Blue-Green
Speaks: Japanese, English, conversational French
Enjoys: Volleyball, American and German rock music
Is Bad At: Cooking, expressing herself
Is Good At: Volleyball, organizing
Allergies: Dust/Mold
Attended: Yumekoto High School


Edits
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 1:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well... >.> Hmmmm... <.<

Its not the lengthiest app I've seen (in relation to how long Kura's been on the site) but long isn't always better. The only thing I'd say you should add is how the hell she got the tattoo (which I admit I had to stare at before it hit me in the head...much like a hammer as well ^^)

I believe you told me how it got there but I can't seem to find it in writing. And I imagine waking up in a hospital with ink on your arm is somewhat surprising (once she remembers who she is). Adding that would be the proverbial icing on the cake. Otherwise, looks good to me.
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 11:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Okay...Takai is a little unique. But everything looks fine to me now, I'll pass this along to one of the admins.

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EnkouKitsune04: Tatsuki: "HIYAAA!" *CRUNCH*
EnkouKitsune04: Mizuro: *Pick up Hot chicks!!!*
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 5:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

App APPROVED.

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